Longing

[Andrew.McGivery]

I need you to
Pick me up when I fall down
Hold your hands in mine
I want to feel your breath
On the back of my neck
Send shivers down my spine

Why do I feel this way?
How did things get like this?
I’d give up anything, and everything
To just be with you
Believe me, it’s true

I am longing for you
Longing for your hands
I stare into your eyes
And I know I want you back
There nothing in this world
That could replace what you are
And there’s nothing in this world
That could replace what we had

I feel so alone in this place
I feel like I’m standing in a field
A field of misery, I’m all alone
No one can hear my screams, my shouts
I’m calling out for you
I need you right here
I need you with me
This longing is misery

Come back to me
I’ll give you anything you want
I’ll do anything for you
I’ll take a bullet to the chest
I’ll jump off a bridge
I’ll work my life away
I’ll give up everything
If you let me show you the way

I just want one little thing
One little thing in life
If I had this little thing
Everything would make sense
I need you
I want you
I long for you
I live for you
I cry for you
I exist for you
I need this little thing
I need it right now
Before I fall apart

I am falling apart inside
Watch the pieces fall
Shimmering in the sun
Flying in the wind
My heart longs for you
My soul is for you
Everything inside of me
Longs for you
I live for you

Nothing you could do… will change this.
Nothing you could say… will change my mind.
Nothing can be done… to change my feelings
Nothing can be done to change…
That I love you.

[nathanielgresham]

It shows true feelings of a true human. We all fall to pieces and we can't go back. You are a wonderful poet Fredy!

[Andrew.McGivery]

thank you guys

[Conor]

The poem is good. I have a way to improve it

In this stanza,
I need you to
Pick me up when I fall down
Hold your hands in mine
I want to feel your breath
On the back of my neck
Send shivers down my spine

I think you should have wrote:
I need you to pick me up
When I fall down
Hold your hands in mine
I want to feel your breath
On the back of my neck
Send shivers down my spine