Instant Fame

[Conor]

As my foot breaks through the 2 inch board,
I realize,
Fame is within grasp,
Then,
I think to myself
"Is fame what I'm looking for?"

I realize,
That its not,
"But still,"
I think to myself,
"Wouldn't it be great?"

Again I think,
Its all too much,
As my fist,
Hits Sensei in the chest.
As I gain the Trophy,
36 tall,
12 wide,
I think,
"It wasn't that hard"

The crowd goes wild,
Their cheering riotous,
I look to the sky,
I bow my head,
Nearly to my knees.

A Poem/Story thing
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Give me your opinion!
(I think it sucks)

[ScottCool]

I agree, You did a great job all you need is a little work

[Conor]

Thanks. Could you please specify as to how to make it better?

[Conor]

thanks that actually did help quite a bit.